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Primevil (Read 192 times)
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Primevil
Nov 23rd, 2009 at 2:41am
 
Primevil

Primarily I crave
the primality of your scent
within my skin.
I reek of Adam,
You of Eve,
Collectively dripping sin.
Lap it up, before the serpent strikes.
Lap it up, ‘til God, Himself
comes.   

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Re: Primevil
Reply #1 - Nov 23rd, 2009 at 4:48am
 
Being the original apple tasters would be exciting to say the least.   Even more erotic is the
possibility of being caught and punished for the dirty deed.  That's my impression.
This is great reading and invites exciting mental images.   

Primarily I crave
the primality of your scent
within my skin. (upon my skin?)
I reek of Adam,
You of Eve,
Collectively dripping sin.
Lap it up, before the serpent strikes.
Lap it up, ‘til God, Himself (is comma nec. here?)
comes.   

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