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Rising (Read 83 times)
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Rising
Jul 30th, 2010 at 9:48pm
 
Brick by brick, I emerge from the rubble,
Knowing that the road ahead is littered with trouble

Whilst clambering up the mountain of life,
I was oblivious to the impending strife

To detach myself exacerbated the pain,
Emerging from the darkness caused much strain

The journey was long and testing,
No time or place for resting

The doors to life were thrust open wide,
Now I had no place to hide

Expecting not be seen,
You proved to be keen

It’s time again to feel alive,
It’s time to take control and drive.

*My mind went completely blank and the final four lines are weak. The message is there but it needs improvement. Thought I'd post for opinions in the meantime.*
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Re: Rising
Reply #1 - Aug 18th, 2010 at 3:58pm
 
The rhyme scheme can get a bit repetitive, but I like the flow
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